Tuesday, September 25, 2007

Journal Entry #13

Write an academic paragraph. Try your best to give three reasons supporting the topic sentence. Don't forget to give examples and write a concluding sentence.

Topic sentence: There are several reasons to eat fruits and vegetables.

There are several reasons to eat fruits and vegetables. Fruits and vegetables are important to your life, your health. First, eating fruits and vegetable reduce heart disease to a minimum, especially the stroke. Many researches show that a person who has heart disease but, if he eats fruits and vegetables everyday, his health improves more than before. It also can prevent the Hypertension and reduce the cholesterol content. The result from the research which was named DASH showed that a person who eats a lot of fruits and vegetables and low fat food can reduce his blood pressure at least 11 mg. Although all kinds of fruits and vegetables are good for your health but, outweigh is lettuce, cauliflower, cabbage, orange, lemon, grape fruit, apple and its juice. Second, eating fruits and vegetables can prevent cancer diseases. Cancer is really dangerous to our lives so that prevent cancer is important. Some kinds of fruits and vegetables are attested that they can prevent cancer such as: curcuma, tomato, cabbage, grapefruit, green tea, soybean, garlic, etc. Japaneses who live in Okinawa island have the highest longevities in the world because they live in a pure pollution and they eat fresh vegetables, seaweed and fish. The third reason is eating fruits and vegetables help us have bright eyes and beautiful skin. To have a bright eyes, your health need provided enough fruits and vegetables because they are vitamin A sources which is very necessary for your eyes. For example, carrots provide a huge vitamin A for our eyes and help our eyes brighter. Especially, fruits and vegetables prevent cataract and low eyesight which occur to old people. Eating a lot of fruits and vegetables could have a beautiful skin. Your skin would be smooth and ruddy. In conclusion, an important way to have a good health is putting fruits and vegetables in your daily menu.

2 comments:

Kaitlyn said...

You support main sentence very well!!
But do not forget about this.

any researches show that a person who has heart disease but, if he eats fruits and vegetables everyday

--> disease, but if...^^

Paula said...

Corrections:

but.......(,but)
so........(,so)
such as.......(such as 1, 2 and 3.)